SHALLOW (One Shot Wednesday)
Dwindled love
stormy seas
maze of lies
in wasted fields
fragments of me
are breaking off
mortal silence
in every breath
human beings
shadows of shame
forever lost
in utter darkness
of shallow seekers
for happiness
©AvdL 2010
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SEAT OF MY SOUL 
August 31, 2010 at 5:14 am
A kind of dark vision, well written. – Bill
August 31, 2010 at 6:06 am
Just fiction Bill…thanks and hope your week has started well:) Hugs x
August 31, 2010 at 5:16 am
great poem/pic. maze of lies / in wasted fields. such a powerful image, both real and emotional, slammed together! loved it!
August 31, 2010 at 6:06 am
Thanks so much..fiction but happy you liked it my friend xx
August 31, 2010 at 5:35 am
Such despair make me wanna give someone a hug. Very moving, Buttercup.
August 31, 2010 at 6:07 am
I felt that hug :):) Thanks so much Eric and right back at you xxx
August 31, 2010 at 12:30 pm
I also want to give a hug!
September 1, 2010 at 6:19 am
Awwwww…that was sooo sweet, I felt that girlfriend xxxxx Mwah xx
August 31, 2010 at 6:49 am
I really love your style, it’s like random organization…the thoughts are very organized to the point, but are ordered randomly; it allows one to feel the the whirlwind of emotion while seeing the point very clearly. As always, well done! Another Trifecta, Red 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:02 am
Thanks Cowboy…happy when you are 🙂
September 4, 2010 at 7:25 am
Oh, I totally agree with Tracy’s comment above…your writing captures the reader in a whirlwind of emotions! So true! xx
September 4, 2010 at 9:54 am
Mwah Mwah Mwah xxx
August 31, 2010 at 7:28 am
Emotional poem, stunning photograph … and isn’t Cher fabulous. Have always like her.
Like the way feelings pile on feelings here. Well done as always, Amanda! Good poem. Good story-telling.
August 31, 2010 at 10:04 pm
Just got an email from my friend, Laurel. You made a fan out of her with this one. Good job! 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:43 am
She is awesome…thanks so much Jamie. Mwah xx
September 1, 2010 at 6:02 am
Thanks Jamie, I love all of Cher’s music…she is one of a kind. Huggies xx
August 31, 2010 at 8:39 am
Drawing feelings galore.
September 1, 2010 at 6:05 am
Appreciate your comments so much…have a good day my friend xx
August 31, 2010 at 8:46 am
Spellbinding. The words are distinctly abrupt and cutting, an emotional statement of disdain you make in verse. The Cher video was a fitting climax. You amaze me, Amanda. Artfully done. Thank you for sharing. xxoo my friend across the sea.
September 1, 2010 at 6:06 am
I smile so wide….love your comments my dear friend…huggies xxxx
August 31, 2010 at 8:47 am
So haunting and deep. It made me sit back and think. Love it! Great photograph too- such a penetrating stare. Bravo!!
September 1, 2010 at 6:06 am
Thanks Tekia, I appreciate your comments so very much xxxxx
August 31, 2010 at 9:11 am
It’s great.
Loved it..
wow…
September 1, 2010 at 6:08 am
Thanks my friend, really appreciate your presence here xxx Have a good day xxx
August 31, 2010 at 10:05 am
perfect format,
powerful image,
you always amaze people.
🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:10 am
Thanks Ji oxoxoxoxox 🙂 🙂 🙂
August 31, 2010 at 10:28 am
*fragments of me
are breaking off*
that goes for me ….. !
making this poem of your my heart favorite 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:12 am
Awww…that is such a sweet thing to say!! Thanks so very much…give you lots of hugs for that 🙂 🙂 🙂 xx
August 31, 2010 at 10:58 am
So true, Amanda… For some people, life’s just a sheet of words with no feeling, a bunch of lies, a box of broken fragments that can be joined together by tape… Little do they realize that life can be best when lived truly and with mind and heart together in ONE place! And not as dysfunctional hypocrites!
This was a very poignant poem… and I could apply it to quite a few situations… But then again, the general outlook towards life takes precedence… if that’s positive, reactions to such situations also are more forgiving 🙂 What do you think?!
This was a very very fine read, my friend… it touched my heart in the deepest of corners…
MUAAHHH!!! You rock!!! (hugs and love) xxxx
August 31, 2010 at 12:31 pm
Very good comment Kavita 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:19 am
She has the most amazing comments ALWAYS…. xx
September 1, 2010 at 9:00 am
Oh… thank you Cindy and Amanda! This one just flowed out my mind and thru my fingers.. I swear!
September 1, 2010 at 3:57 pm
LOL!! xx
September 1, 2010 at 6:17 am
I have met many of these people in my lifetime and it is a shame because it can never ever bring happiness…luckily we have choices…and fortunately I choose the positive!! Yeahhhh…I am off to art school today…will be missing all of you and will catch up when I come back babes. Much love and Mwahzzzzzzzzzzzzz xxxxxxxx
September 1, 2010 at 9:01 am
HURRAYYY to art!!! 🙂 Hope you had fun, sweets!!!
September 1, 2010 at 3:57 pm
Been a longgggg day BUT OH MY WORD, the BEST fun…learned soooo much about blending and fading today!!! And busy doing a new piece….called….. trala….”Lady in Red”!!!! xxxx Mwah x
September 1, 2010 at 4:14 pm
hahaha…Lady in RED.. I should have guessed! I think I too will start looking for some art classes around here… I NEED to learn to paint!! :)…no..seriously!!
September 1, 2010 at 6:02 pm
Kavita, it is the most awesome thing to do…it’s creative, lifting your spirit and just like writing….so very rewarding!!!….Please give it a go, you will not be sorry.xx
August 31, 2010 at 12:40 pm
life and happiness are indeed shallow. Beautifully written with the dark tone around it, love it Amanda!<3
September 1, 2010 at 6:20 am
Thanks so very much, and have to say…loveeeee to see you here…Much love my friend!!! :):):
August 31, 2010 at 2:23 pm
What a wasted life that is… the imageries are so well structured, Amanda, great job 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 6:21 am
Thanks Imagina….glad you liked it…..luckily just fiction:) xxxxx Love you xx
August 31, 2010 at 2:27 pm
the image of the frangments breaking off so aptly describes the pain, i love it
September 1, 2010 at 6:22 am
Thanks so much…so wonderful to see you here 🙂 Have a great day my friend xxx
August 31, 2010 at 2:35 pm
You’ve got that right, Amanda! Shallow seekers most of us are unfortunately… and shadows of shame… in many ways!
September 1, 2010 at 6:23 am
Thanks Adee xxx Hugs x
August 31, 2010 at 3:06 pm
Very intense, well written. “shadows of shame” I enjoyed the imagery
I love the photo!
September 1, 2010 at 6:25 am
Nice to see you here and thanks so much for the comment….happy day to you 🙂 🙂
August 31, 2010 at 3:07 pm
Wow!! Very well written. Full of emotions.
September 1, 2010 at 6:27 am
Thanks Claudia…soooo happy to see you here…I really appreciate it so much. Hugs xx
August 31, 2010 at 3:29 pm
Shining again my friend! Wonderful poem and deeper thoughts from within from me! xx
September 1, 2010 at 6:28 am
Ditto and sending you hugs my friend xxx
August 31, 2010 at 4:31 pm
Wow, this one sent shivers down my spine as I read it. One of your best out of all I’ve read so far. So much haunting truth, we are indeed seekers of shallow happiness. Great poem Amanda, keep them coming!
September 1, 2010 at 6:29 am
Now that was an awesome comment…it means so much coming from you my friend…your feedback is very important as you know I am your biggest fan. Much love my friend xxx
August 31, 2010 at 6:10 pm
just fabulous. very very beautiful way of writing and wise thoughts.
September 1, 2010 at 6:37 am
Thanks so much Trisha…happy when I see your beautiful icon here :):): Hugs x
August 31, 2010 at 9:32 pm
Glad to see in your replies above that this is, indeed, fictional projected thoughts. If you were feeling like that – at least if I were – you’d be unable to write and go through the process of posting it with pic. I wonder if there has ever been any work done in having depressed or distraught people write positive poetry to help them climb out.
I like the simplicity you use, makes it more poignant. Especially like “in wasted fields”, it hits just the right note and tone at its moment
September 1, 2010 at 6:42 am
It makes me soooo happy when I see you here Lawrence, and yes, you’re right, just fictional…I share your feeling about not being able to write from those dark corners…we all have been there!! Hope you are feeling better and will come over and visit soon. Have a great day my friend xx 🙂
August 31, 2010 at 11:26 pm
nice poem to be able to go deep with shallowness. This is the second post I’ve read today about shallowness preceded by a long converstion about it. Synchronicity!
September 1, 2010 at 6:49 am
Amazing…thanks for your comment my friend!!! 🙂
August 31, 2010 at 11:41 pm
The emotion of the poem combined with the picture image…amazing. Loved.
September 1, 2010 at 6:50 am
Very happy when you are my friend xx Much love xx
September 1, 2010 at 4:12 am
Very well written poem……….
September 1, 2010 at 6:51 am
Thanks Neva, happy to see you here and thanks for the comment xxx
September 1, 2010 at 6:49 am
you are super gr8…. xoxo
September 1, 2010 at 8:16 am
Buttercup…Oh Buttercup. What a lovely write. Great One Shot! Love and Light, Sender
September 1, 2010 at 3:26 pm
I so appreciate your comment and visit here….very glad you like it my friend. Much love ~ Amanda x
September 1, 2010 at 8:22 am
in shallow seekers of happiness…if all we seek is what makes us happy in the moment..shallow indeed..nice one shot amanda…sad….
September 1, 2010 at 3:31 pm
Thanks Brian, always appreciate your valuable comments. Much love my friend x
September 1, 2010 at 8:42 am
fragments of me breaking off..great image…bkm
September 1, 2010 at 3:45 pm
Thanks so much my friend x
September 1, 2010 at 8:46 am
To me it brought up that seemingly hopeless and unattainable search for something out there. I love the poem! xoxo
September 1, 2010 at 3:46 pm
Thanks so much Patty, really appreciate your comment and visit. Have a great week xxx
September 1, 2010 at 8:47 am
Loved the poem, it brought up that seemingly unattainable search we can have for something always just out of reach and outside of us.
September 1, 2010 at 9:01 am
Such sadness. I’m so glad it’s fiction and you’re not feeling this way.
Have a great day.
My poem is here.
September 1, 2010 at 3:59 pm
Thanks my dear friend, happy it’s just fiction too…and ditto:) xx
September 1, 2010 at 10:05 am
Shallow seekers of instant gratification that society seems geared to provide. Excellent write.
September 1, 2010 at 4:03 pm
Thanks so much my friend…your comments sounds like sweet honey to my ears….much love xx
September 1, 2010 at 10:06 am
The cries of a broken heart. The pages of poetry are strewn with the words of star crossed lovers because we’ve all been there. Shallow mirth..i can relate to that 🙂 Well done. Thank you. Gay
September 1, 2010 at 5:40 pm
Thanks so much Gay, I really appreciate you stopping here and commenting….means much. Hugs x
September 1, 2010 at 12:30 pm
Haunting poem. “Shallow seekers of happiness” – too many doing that too often.
September 1, 2010 at 5:43 pm
I agree my friend…soooo happy to see you here…Happy One Shot my friend xxxx
September 1, 2010 at 12:53 pm
AMANDAAAA..love how this poem made me feel..pausing with each word,going there..FANTASTIC one shot! :))
September 1, 2010 at 5:44 pm
You know you make me smile with your presence here, don’t you???? Sending you much love dear one…Hugs xxxxx 🙂
September 1, 2010 at 3:34 pm
If this poem were a chocolate bar….I would eat it…………………..and the wrapping. Yum!
September 1, 2010 at 5:55 pm
How cute are you with such a wonderful comment, thanks so much for being here my friend…I really appreciate it xxx
September 1, 2010 at 6:33 pm
Buttercup,
Dark & delicious. Tight and intense.
Loved it.
September 2, 2010 at 2:43 pm
Thanks so much, really appreciate your comment and visit here so very much. Have a great day x
September 2, 2010 at 12:59 am
if we wasnt so shallow would we be in so much debt?? your beautifully crafted piece asks so many questions..an excellent poem..cheers pete
September 2, 2010 at 2:47 pm
Thanks Pete, your words are like honey to my ears….always very happy to have you here. Thanks so very much x
September 2, 2010 at 1:18 am
Your words described despair and hopelessness to a T. A sad story to be sure.
September 2, 2010 at 2:48 pm
Just fiction my friend but thanks so much for your coment and visit here, I truly appreciate it so much x
September 2, 2010 at 5:20 am
Hi.. this one touched me… Loved this read.. Luv surbhi
September 2, 2010 at 3:16 pm
Thanks so much Surbi…your presence here makes me very very happy….always much love to you xx
September 2, 2010 at 7:30 am
wonderful message here !!
September 2, 2010 at 3:17 pm
Thanks so much my friend. your comments always makes me smile and so very happy 🙂 x
September 2, 2010 at 9:37 am
I love the short lines and rhythm to go with the topic. Excellent!
September 2, 2010 at 3:18 pm
Thanks so much Teresa…you made me very happy with your comment. Have a happy day my friend xx
September 2, 2010 at 12:32 pm
Great poem. It was touching as it was easy to connect to. Thank you for sharing.
September 2, 2010 at 3:40 pm
Thanks Corby…your comments means so much and I truly appreciate you being here x
September 2, 2010 at 1:57 pm
This was such a powerful and emotional piece, Amanda. Great images. The flow of the short made the emotions “feel” very real, the way they would flow though the person experiencing them.
September 2, 2010 at 3:45 pm
Patti, you are such a talented and respected poet and writer, I feel honored that you come and visit me here….I value your friendship so very much. Sending you love across the ocean my friend xx
September 2, 2010 at 9:04 pm
I reread this several times — and what kept coming to mind was “dark night of the soul.” Well done.
September 3, 2010 at 12:18 pm
Thank you Glynn, makes me very happy to see you here. Sending you hugs x
September 3, 2010 at 1:50 pm
painful reality
dwindled…
shadows…
shallow…
kinda like a black hole
Moon smiles
September 4, 2010 at 9:36 am
So true Leslie, hope you have a wonderful weekend my friend xx
September 4, 2010 at 1:21 am
Your poems are not usually so dark girl, but it is beautifully written. Glad to read elsewhere on your blog that spring is arriving for you. Here autumn is waiting outside the door as we have our 2nd official heatwave (5 days or more in a row over 90) of the summer. Spring will conquer everything– just wait for it!
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September 4, 2010 at 9:49 am
Wow, hope it cools down soon…and I don’t normally write dark poems but wanted to try something different…away from the normal. Fun Fun FUn xxx
September 4, 2010 at 7:27 am
I LOVE the flow of this one Amanda – amazing xx
September 4, 2010 at 9:54 am
Green is my favourite color today :):):) 🙂 Love you and thanks xx