UTOPIA


 

 

Was it just the wind

or him kissing my cheek

 

Was it just the sunshine

or his arms embrace

 

Was it just the galaxy

or him sharing my dream

 

Was it just a raindrop

or him giving me hope

 

That was yesterday

not today…..

 

©AmandavdL 2010

 

 

71 Responses to “UTOPIA”

  1. Nice one! I was really swept along by the wonderful vibe in this, and then you surprised me with the last two lines. I went, “Aaawww… so it didn’t work out after all!” 😦

    Beautifully done though. I like this a lot. 🙂

  2. Reminiscing on sweet memories brought by love or a utopia for real? Nice one…

    Cheers.

    • Reminiscing on sweet memories that was 🙂 🙂 …Reminiscing….the stimulation is wonderful (David Prescott)..Not to long though, reality’s better 🙂 Hugs xx

  3. it was yesterday, but it was very dreamy and lovely thoughts.
    have fun!
    😉

  4. Lovely memories…
    “Was it just the galaxy
    or him sharing my dream” – found this analogy absolutely beautiful!! When you share dreams with the one you love, everything seems so perfect and larger than life… these lines convey that meaning so beautifully!
    Well.. the reality was yesterday…today is a collection of beautiful realities… don’t ever lose it! But don’t cling on it so much that you miss the beautiful moments of today…
    Memories are a portkey to another lovely tomorrow as well!

    Having said that, Happy Thursday to you, Amanda!!!
    Looovvviiiieeezzzz to you….
    And hope to see you soon on pages here and there 🙂
    Take care, girlie… MWAH!!!

    • I have to say that writing about yesterday…creating memories from the past, is a healing process for me and it’s not good to cling to them for too long. I have luckily moved forward and embrace what today and tomorrow brings. It’s obvious what my heart’s feelings are and it’s part of this romantic fool I am…always write about love…be it good or bad!!! LOLOLOL..Or maybe an outlet for the dreams I have in mind for the future hahahahaha:)…I so treasure and appreciate your comments dear one…don’t ever stop!! Can you believe it’s Thursday here already!! Spring is around the corner and that makes me very excited!! Can’t wait. (Already saw you on so many pages…how do you do it!!! Phewwwww)…Hugs girlfriend xxxx

  5. Very thought provoking and interesting.

  6. Engaging and suggestive. I like the way it suggests much and keeps my mind open. Especially . -the ending. – Bill

  7. This could be utopia

  8. Oh wow, Amanda, this is amazing. I love the romance of it, the first four stanzas, and then a sort of let-down, only it could be taken another way, a letting go of yesterday – however it turned out, however real or imagined its events were – to live in today’s moments.

    It’s a beautiful poem.

    • Thanks so much for your invaluable comment, it means much to me…and you’re right…it can be taken another way. I thought the twist at the end would make it a bit thought provoking!! Sending you love 🙂

  9. It’s like the world stops turning for a minute, and then, suddenly, it starts back, and all that wind that had been waiting for you rushes right toward you and knocks you down with the freshness of life and breath.
    Your Poem made me think of this line from Kerouac:

    “What is the feeling when you’re driving away from
    people, and they recede on the plain till you see their specks
    dispersing? -it’s the too huge world vaulting us, and it’s good-bye.
    But we lean forward to the next crazy venture beneath the skies.” ~Jack Kerouac

    • I love him….”All human beings are also dream beings. Dreaming ties all mankind together.”…and forward we lean!! Sometimes reality steps in, I believe, always for a reason, even when we don’t want to know. I so love what you wrote, thanks for being here, it warms my heart and I value your comments. Have a wonderful day (or is it sweet dreams?) It’s Thurday 12.30pm here in Australia…I send you much love my dear friend x

      • I try to find wonderful in wake and in dreams.
        It haunts me when I stumble, and humbles me when I surrender.
        Thank you for writing, wherever you are and whomever you reach!

        ~Lee

  10. It was all those things and anything you wish it to be… beautiful reminiscing
    here… wishing all these things for your near-in-the-future tomorrow. Love the eyes…wish mine could change colors like that! 🙂 xxx Heartspell

  11. Beautiful combination of image, enchanting words, and music. Thank you for sharing.

  12. Patty Sherry Says:

    I love the line ….was it just the galaxy or him sharing my dream.

    Call it my projection here, but sharing a dream with someone can seem as big if not bigger and more expanding than the galaxy. I love the analogy. I also love your visual…the eyes and the words of your poem seeing into the soul.

    xoxo

  13. As a high school English teacher, I wish I could say you were one of my students. Such powerful imagery! I see the lines as metaphors: sunshine/arms embrace, galaxy/him sharing my dream, raindrop/hope.
    So much depth and meaning here. I’m glad you stopped by my blog, so I could then know to visit yours–well worth visiting.

  14. I thought of Joni Mitchell’s words … ‘love’s illusion’ …
    Baie mooi geskryf, vriendin.

  15. Another home run…great lines of beautiful words…xx

  16. Oh my, the last two lines hold so much sadness. You titled your poem very aptly. Lovely and sad poem, sadly things like that are only utopia. Great piece!

    Apologies for not visiting earlier, been too bogged down with work, and when I’m not working all I can do is sleep.

    Take care, and have a lovely day!

    • I understand my dear, I have the same problem, trying to keep it burning at both ends…I so appreciate you being here….it makes me smile. I send you loads of love 🙂 🙂

  17. divine…… that was yesterday …my childhood friend God…..

    not today….

    love all….

  18. “That was yesterday
    not today…..”
    Lovely Amanda! 🙂
    I keep telling that to myself, everyday… To keep the worries of yesterday where they belong, in the past. And to remind myself that this is a new day, a new opportunity…

  19. Beautiful poetry, Red. You never disappoint when you write from your heart, an excellent piece. Sorry for the sadness in the end, but c’est la vie.

    Cowboy

  20. Wow! You are so awsome!!! I really appreciate your kindness and friendship. thank you, your support is held in high reguards and is very valuable to me. you are precious, I love this poem and all of your writing!!!!!!
    thank you, your friend, alan

  21. Ilakya Spandhanaa Says:

    Amanda.. your last two lines gave me a jolt..!! I was reading thru your poem, and it was so amazing it literally took me to this beautiful Utopia you had described and the last two lines brought me back to reality without warning 😛 !! Interesting twist..!!

  22. Was it a paradise or , just his love for me 🙂
    You said it all in a few lines Amanda 🙂 I like it a lot !

  23. this was a joy to read. and the picture of the eye…fabulous!!!

    thank you for visiing and commenting. i hope you return often.

    smiles,

  24. Beautiful utopia :O *Repeat mode* Thank for sharing!=D

  25. I like this very much……momories…….always there…..

  26. Beautiful, and the music is perfect for it. Your poem brings home the reality that the mind is not the only thing that remembers. The body remembers too.

  27. “was it”

    a powerful little question. so much possibility in the answer

  28. What a lovely poem! So beautifully simple.

  29. I really liked this…the final stanza was bittersweet…and perfect.

  30. your work stirs lots of different emotions, the class of a prolific writer as yourself xx

  31. Short, sweet , with a touch of sassy at the end. Nice….

  32. lifeinarecipe Says:

    Beautiful. It made me think of when the clouds are so low to the ground, creating a mist. You can see it and feel its presence. It is there, but not something you can actually grasp and hold on to.

  33. I liked the hope part. But, I kind of pouted at the end. Well, there’s always tomorrow. 😉

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