FRAGMENTS
The dark of your pupil
sugar in your spoon
you act like a child
inexperienced and blind
scapegoat for everything
the splinter in my eye
your dark side rise
holding me back
I struggle
my future
becomes
clear
©AmandavdL 2010
-
Follow
Following
Already have a WordPress.com account? Log in now.
SEAT OF MY SOUL 
August 14, 2010 at 6:57 am
Loved it Buttercup =)
August 14, 2010 at 10:10 am
Thanks Sunny, happy you liked it, thanks so much for the comment and have a great weekend x
August 14, 2010 at 7:00 am
powerfully said!
😉
August 14, 2010 at 10:09 am
Different from the normal love poems…(fiction)…thanks Ji. xxx
August 14, 2010 at 8:00 am
Captivating. I had to read it several times…so many twists and turns to my imagination. It is a true work of art!
August 14, 2010 at 10:08 am
Tried to write something fictional, away from the neverending sad love stories….Thanks dear one….Hugs x
August 14, 2010 at 8:03 am
very nicely done… love the pic too! 🙂
August 14, 2010 at 10:07 am
Thanks so very much, I appreciate your visit and wonderful comment x
August 14, 2010 at 8:11 am
I feel the emotion in your words. The photo of the woman with a tear on her face says it all. I am listening to the music now. Very dynamic work of art, Amanda. Thank you for sharing.
August 14, 2010 at 10:06 am
Thanks Carol….tried to write something different (fiction) away from the neverending love scenes!!! LOL….hope you have a brilliant weekend…I’m going to seek the sun, it’s a beautiful day and will come and look at all the new postings later in the day. Have a great weekend my friend x
August 14, 2010 at 9:53 am
WOW! How you’ve described that helplessness, is really quite amazing Amanda!!
It really had me hooked! I had images flashing in my mind… bbbrrr… and they were not very pretty either! I almost saw you sitting with a painting of this expression.. I dunno why and how, but I just did!!!
Your choice of image and song are perfect here! 🙂
For a looooooooooooong time, Don’t Speak was my favorite song… I used to sing (more like croak) it all the time!! Even now, I involuntarily started singing it! 🙂
Phheeww…amazing piece of fiction! You should try G-Man’s Flash Friday 55! 🙂
Hope you are having a Serene Saturday Morning! 🙂
Enjoy a fabulous weekend, girlie! LOVE YA LOADS!
August 15, 2010 at 8:31 am
I love love love that song so very much too…had to laugh when I read your comment….LOLOLOL…thanks my friend, you being here warms my heart and I value your friendship more than I can ever say!! Dont ever forget that!! Whatever you do, have a FABULOUS weekend my dear friend. Sending you so much love xxxx
August 14, 2010 at 12:32 pm
OMG!!!!! this is BRILLIANT!!!the image and the song match perfectly with the poem….wonderfully put…Have an amazing saturday:)
August 15, 2010 at 8:01 am
So happy you liked it girlfriend…and ditto:):):) Much love x
August 14, 2010 at 1:42 pm
Love this song…my daughter used to listen to it all the time. It goes perfectly with the mood of the poem and the photo. The splinter in my eye…. now that is sharp pain; pain to be better of without. Loved the character’s realization h at the end of the poem.:) Heartspell xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
August 15, 2010 at 8:02 am
Tried to write something different this time…and I love that song too…awesome. Hugs to you :):):) x
August 14, 2010 at 3:22 pm
A short story in a short poem. Very good. I like it … A little different turn for you??? 🙂 Nice.
Happy Saturday …
August 15, 2010 at 8:03 am
Totally different and it was fun…hope you still enjoy your weekend my friend :):):) xx
August 14, 2010 at 3:31 pm
Very interesting, nice tight framework for a dark tale.
August 15, 2010 at 8:04 am
Thanks Cindy…very dark for me but was nice to try something different. Hope you’re having a FABULOUS weekend….and I send you much love my friend xx
August 14, 2010 at 10:33 pm
wow, amazing how such small words can portray such powerful emotions if written properly 🙂
August 15, 2010 at 8:10 am
Thanks so much Alethea, I truly appreciate your kind words, it means much. Hugs x
August 15, 2010 at 12:02 am
Wow, very powerful.. : )
August 15, 2010 at 8:11 am
Thanks for visiting my friend….have a great weekend x
August 15, 2010 at 1:26 am
so dark and so full of emotion–very nice.
August 15, 2010 at 8:12 am
Thanks for your kind comment, makes me happy to see you here and I value your support so very much xx
August 15, 2010 at 4:18 am
I love this……darky stuff is for me by far the greatest…..take care over there….
August 15, 2010 at 8:17 am
Thanks my friend…a little different from the normal love scene LOLOL…hope you’re enjoying your weekend x
August 15, 2010 at 4:22 am
Dark and beautiful. Love it!
August 15, 2010 at 8:17 am
Different for me :):):) Hugs x
August 15, 2010 at 6:52 am
Sugar in your spoon? Dark of your pupils? LOVE those images, and this poem.
And that No Doubt song!!
xo
August 15, 2010 at 8:19 am
Thanks so very much for being here….I love love love that song so much too:) Hope you have a FABULOUS weekend my friend. Hugs x
August 15, 2010 at 7:18 am
Amanda, you have done it again…used your unique style to say so very much in a simple, succinct way. I really like this slight departure in theme as well.
Well done 🙂
Tracy
August 15, 2010 at 8:20 am
Very different for me cowboy…one has to vent sometimes, don’t you think!! Wink xxxx
August 15, 2010 at 4:00 pm
I got wrapped up with your words on this lovely poem. It was very intense and full of passion. 🙂
August 16, 2010 at 12:01 pm
Wow….. so many messages from you makes me very happy. Thanks so much Luisa, I am sending one message to cover all…..running so far behind and feels like I’ll never catch up!! Hope your week will be a wonderful and smiling one!!! Hugs and love to you xxxx
August 15, 2010 at 8:43 pm
oh my 😦
um…… no words 😛
August 16, 2010 at 12:05 pm
Wink wink….xxxxxx
August 16, 2010 at 3:36 pm
Helplessness at the sharp edge of a tooth’s blade. Yes, I really did feel that. Very effective, Amanda.
August 17, 2010 at 7:24 am
Thanks Tony, tried to break away form the normal….glad you liked it 🙂