EMERGING (One Shot Wednesday)


 

 

Like a pebble

falls in a pond

ripples grow wider

words that cut

making me deaf

chains in my mind

lost within

darkness

your ice

cold heart

spreading

rings ever

wider

cocoon

opens

and

 butterfly

 spreads

its wings

 

©AmandavdL 2010

 

This is my poem for One Shot Wednesday, run by One Stop Poetry, a fast growing community for poets & writers of all genres to share their work, express and make friends.  Come join us, just click on the link!! FUN!! 

72 Responses to “EMERGING (One Shot Wednesday)”

  1. I always love your poetry(:

  2. beautiful…how do you do it!!!this is for u:)
    http://hoiden.wordpress.com/awards/

  3. plz delete the above post…sorry abt that….

  4. Flutter by, sweet yellow butterfly
    now drift upward,up, up, up
    no wonder you are called dear Buttercup!
    Such hopefullness in this poem, she has wings to fly away…loved it! 🙂 xxxxxxx Heartspell

  5. well said,

    a lovely transformation..
    🙂

  6. In three words…Dark, Powerful, Victorious !

    I think this speaks volumes, Amanda. I am touched every day by you and your work…Thank You from my heart.

    Tracy

  7. Up, up and away 🙂

  8. Chains in my mind. Now that’s an evocative image if ever I read one. And yet the butterfly is not bound by them when all’s said and done. Very encouraging, Amanda. 🙂

  9. Love the butterfly imagery Amanda- lovely poem, beautiful words as always! I love how you create deep emotions with such simple words! 🙂

  10. Lovely imagery – and so true!

  11. ah!!! nice 🙂

    a nice pic too 🙂

    but amanda off late ur poems are bit not happy!!! 😦 why?

    be happy na?

    but this is abt butterfly!!! so that’s ok 🙂

  12. Another beautiful poem, Amanda. The artwork so perfectly illustrates it. Thank you for sharing your creative work.

  13. Absolutely lovely, Amanda! I don’t know what I like more: the poem or the illustration. Good work … I really enjoy your blog.

    I was just over at Tracy’s: I think you and he have cornered romantic in our little community. 🙂

  14. You write such lovely poetry.

  15. mairmusic Says:

    A beautiful image of escape from heartache. or perhaps this winter in Oz. Your style is unmistakable. Have a great week!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

  16. lovely poem – sometimes it’s the chains that free us (or rather, that drive us to free ourselves – once we’ve noticed them, of course), I like the analogy… hugs!

  17. Oh yes! As long as the caterpillar becomes a butterfly, and flies free, everything’s good… All’s well that ends well 🙂

    Barriers, hurdles and obstructions will always be there. Tackling them and emerging free is what shows our character!

    Very well said, Amanda! A strong message in gentle and subtle words… lovely!!

    Have a great week ahead, my lovely friend… LOTSA HUGS!! 😀

    • The caterpillar had a long winter sleep, now it’s time to come to life!!!! Like with everything in life, it takes time!! Yeahhhhhh…lotsa luv right back at you girlfriend. {{{HUgs}}}

  18. Beautiful, and so positive. Every caterpillar turns into a butterfly.

  19. Good heavens, I couldn’t understand where this was going so I kept going back to read again, and suddenly, I saw it. This is like two separate poems with the 2nd poem stuck smack in the middle, splitting the original apart. (The 2nd, being from “words that cut” up to “cold heart.”) It made me think of how we close in upon ourselves when sharp words are thrown by those we love – the words not unlike excalibur, King Arthur’s sword that even pierces stone. We harbor those words and hide them deep inside, festering. And then one day we are ready to let them go; powerful enough to open up, we release the cutting sword – we become the split cocoon and the butterfly, that stemming from the original pebble which rippled outward is tempered, and perfect. Fascinating, beautiful poem! I’m not sure if that’s what you were trying to portray, but that’s where this took me. I enjoyed the journey.

    • Cindy, I am amazed at your enterpretation of what I actually said in this poem…it is 2 poems in one….while I was busy writing…it took another dimention with the cocoon and butterfly…oh my…you have actually taken my breath away because you saw it exactly as I have written it!!…every single word!! It actually gave me goose bumps!!! Thanks my friend, I love the fact that you go deeper…you understood it so well and I appreciate that so very much! WOW…I am speechless ….Hugs dear one xxx

  20. moondustwriter Says:

    Wow – loved the ripples. Sad the circles were cold
    What great visual imagery my friend

    Love from the Moon

  21. just fantastic.

  22. nicely done amanda…the middle part threw me for a moment, but even that became part of the transformation…i am glad she flies…and i think butterflies are very beautiful. thanks for linking up with oneshot again…

  23. so good if we manage to escape from unhappy relationships that want to make us prisoners

  24. Amanda, the imagery you use with the stone ripples and the emergence from a cocoon make think about the butterfly effect of considering chaos. cheers on a great One Shot! (glad you’re a part of it. hugs)

  25. we so easily use words that can cut deep, so easy to use those when we ourselves hurt.

  26. The imagery was so rich and visual. And the hope that emerges was lovely.

  27. Beautiful amanda. An emerald is shaped in adversity. A diamond under incredible pressure. And despite his “ice cold heart” you have given birth to a beautiful butterfly with wings marked in tribute to the transformation of what was to what is.

  28. Amanda i have to admit,this piece is breathtaking! i loved this photo of the red heart..the imagery is amazing,you are such a hell of a poet darling! Super!

  29. very lovely, enjoyed this dear xx

  30. Wow. An excellent poem. Like Cindy I read and reread. Beautiful bit of opening up at the end.

  31. Amanda;

    Artistic, graceful an impeccable good style of poetry

    Lovely words of expression.

    Cheers,
    Joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

  32. a transformation in itself..it started life as a poem and ending up a masterpiece..excellent work pete

  33. soulintention: signed .............bkm Says:

    lovely piece that provokes great thought…bkm

  34. What a beautiful poem, Amanda. Lovely images, and wonderful ending as the butterfly emerges and takes flight. Oh, and what an amazing image!

    • Thanks so much Patti, I appreciate your comment immensely and will be over shortly to read your work…been such a busy time for me and doing catch up as we speak. Sending you love my friend xx

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