COROLLARY
You had the key
to my heart
cum laude
to our applause
like a violin
you played me
producing me
and made me glow
a shimmering lava
maybe a tsunami
our love was…
not strong enough
now locked away
in an unsuccessful
COROLLARY
©AmandavdL 2010
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SEAT OF MY SOUL 
August 19, 2010 at 7:38 pm
Better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all?
Beautiful though.
August 20, 2010 at 8:47 am
Exactly…pure fiction but been there, done that xx
August 19, 2010 at 8:04 pm
like a violin, you played me… Brilliant!
August 20, 2010 at 8:48 am
Thanks so much for your presence and your kind comment….I appreciate it so much. Sending you hugs xxx
August 19, 2010 at 8:10 pm
Heartbreak is always sad. 😦
Beautiful poem though, I love how you ended it.
August 20, 2010 at 8:50 am
Thanks dear one, I smile when I see you here. Mwah x
August 19, 2010 at 8:42 pm
Boy, talk about slamming on the brakes! I just had to read it again.
August 20, 2010 at 8:50 am
Hahahaha, you make me smile Eric…pure fiction and was meant to be that way!! Thanks dear friend xx
August 19, 2010 at 9:32 pm
Beautiful, Amanda. Love the title being the last word!
August 20, 2010 at 9:10 am
Thanks Adee…Hugs x
August 19, 2010 at 9:58 pm
heartbreak…wow! this makes me sad, like it should.
August 20, 2010 at 9:11 am
Thanks Carolina, glad you liked it. xxxx
August 20, 2010 at 12:44 am
Well said commentary on a relationship that fizzled and then burned out. You have such a special talent for making a statement in a few illustrious words! Thank you for sharing your works of art.
August 20, 2010 at 9:33 am
Smiles to you Carol….thanks my friend xx
August 20, 2010 at 2:53 am
Heartbreak is sad.
August 20, 2010 at 9:33 am
Luckily it’s just fiction my friend. Smiles xx
August 20, 2010 at 4:33 am
Angst as a by-product of love is still better than the frustration of not having loved… don’t you think? Ofcourse it’s all easier said than done… (sigh)
This poem such a nice flow to it… like a story… very well done, A… phheeww!!!
I am really liking this new style of yours Amanda – that of highlighting the LAST WORD of your poem! It really adds a lot of effect, and makes an impact!!!
By the way, since when did you start submitting posts in the evening?!!?!?? 🙂 That busy huh??! Take care, my friend…
Loviezzz and hugs coming your way.. please make time for them 🙂 MWAAHH
August 20, 2010 at 4:34 am
Ooohh… and I see that your son’s birthday was/in in May… well well well…. Happy Belated Birthday to him! 🙂 Yea, I know… 3 months late!!! But hey.. I didn’t know..
But now, thanks to the lovely Jingle, I know some of my friends’ birthdays… yaaayyy!
Mwah !!
August 20, 2010 at 9:49 am
Such a long time ago but Ji’s son and mine share the same birthday and she was soooooooooo sweet!!!! When is yours? xxxx Thanks darling:):):)
August 20, 2010 at 4:33 pm
My birthday is on Jan 1st .. 🙂
August 20, 2010 at 9:46 am
hahahahaha…..I don’t know, just came to me last night when I did not feel like going to bed!!!! Happy you liked it dear friend…just goes to show, don’t always need to write in the middle of the night!!! But then I did again:):):)…Darn….can’t change the pattern!! We love it, don’t we?….Loving you beautiful girl……MWAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH AND LOVIEZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ XXX
August 20, 2010 at 5:09 am
Touched deeply by the poem……very emotional
Happy birthday to your son!!!
August 20, 2010 at 9:50 am
Thanks so much for your kind wishes and happy you liked the poem my friend xxxxxx
August 20, 2010 at 7:23 am
hot as lava, overpowering as a tsunami – and still not enough, not strong enough – what can one do? wait for the next one, and know that love is. hugs!
August 20, 2010 at 9:53 am
Thanks darling….that was sweet. Luckily this was just fiction…what goes on in our minds when we write!!!!! Sending you loads of love oxoxox
August 20, 2010 at 9:41 am
wow, so intense
August 20, 2010 at 10:00 am
Thanks Nelly, so appreciate you here. Have a good day my friend x
August 20, 2010 at 3:07 pm
The ebb and flow of relationships, their life and death. It’s a bittersweet thing for sure. Beautifully put, Amanda.
August 21, 2010 at 9:34 am
Thanks my friend….luckily just fiction 🙂 xx
August 21, 2010 at 2:52 am
Some good things do come to an end, but we are always better for having loved.
Lovely, but sad poem. Beautifully illustrated as all your posts are.
Peace and Hugs … catching up today and will be back for more tonight. Meanwhile, you are well into your weekend. Have a good one, Amanda.
August 21, 2010 at 9:34 am
I will do the same later today….so much to do but we’ll get there 🙂 🙂 🙂 Indeed so happy it’s weekend…enjoy my friend xxx